Past/Present poetry

In Year 5, we have been writing past/present comparison poetry.

 

We first learnt how to use semi-colons to separate independent clauses and used this skill to construct poems based on either an elderly family member, the main character from ‘The Piano’ ( a short animation, which you can view below) or Carl from ‘Up’.

 

We hope that you enjoy reading our poems – we are all very proud of them in school!

 

38 thoughts on “Past/Present poetry

  1. A Medic’s lifetime

    Once there was a flirty nurse; now there is a lonely widow.
    Once there were ill,forlorn patients; now there are gleeful,smiley children.

    I wish I could still save lives; I can only apply plasters.
    I wish I could still be merry; I can only remember when I was full of joy

    I used to dream of leaving the city; now I dream of leaving my bed.
    I used to be able to walk with pride; now I can barely walk.

    I never thought I could change; only my appearance has changed.
    I always thought I could achieve ; I have achieved a lifetime.

  2. Once there was a small happy life;now it is boring and I can’t do anything.

    I wish I could tell them all the memories in the past;my mouth won’t move.

    I wish I could do sports;my legs are about to break.

    I used to travel around the world;now I can only travel around the hospital.

  3. Once I had a beautiful wife; the only beauty is her ashes.
    Once there was a house of happiness; sadness is what lingers .
    Once there was luscious smells; harsh odours fill the rooms.
    I wish I could get off the couch; I have to live on it.
    I wish I could see my wife; I can only meet her in my dreams.
    I used to tour around the world; now the world journeys around me.
    I used to dream of going to paradise falls; now I dream of going upstairs.
    I used to think I would always win; winning is out of reach.

  4. Once there was loud chatter; now there is silence,once there was hope for my life; now there is hope to end it.

    I wish I could explore the world;I can the house,I wish I could see colour in the world; I an only see black and white.

    I used to dream to travel to Pardis Falls;now I dream to leave the house,I used to climb mountains;now I climb the stairs.

    I never thought the house could change colour by its self; Eally past away.

  5. Once there was a loving wife;now there is only here grave.
    Once there was a young,handsome bloke;now there is only a scrunched up man.

    I wish I could step onto the war zone one more time ; I can only look at it.
    I wish i could play Mozart ; I am to old to learn.

    I used to have hair on my head ; now I am still wondering were it all went.
    I used to have no one ; now I have a family.

    I never thought I would live this long; here I am,92 years old.
    I always thought I could achieve; I have achieved a lifetime.

  6. The big dream

    Once I had dreams ; now I can only imagine them.
    Along time ago I had parents ; sadly not anymore.

    Our dream was to go to Paradise Falls ; Unfortunately Ellie passed away.
    I use to be loved ; now I long for a friend.

    I used to be in good shape ; now my bones just ache.
    I used to be popular ; now I’m a nobody.

    My life used to be great ; it is getting worse as I grow old.
    I wish I could have a child ; I never will because my Ellie is gone.

  7. Once there was a fighting hero; now there is a soldier.
    Once there were valid teammates; now there are dead bodies.
    I wish I could dream amazing things; my joyful dreams now fade away.
    I wished I could be a pop star ; I did not have the time I thought I had.
    I used to kill people on sight; now I thankfully respect them.
    I used to be active and fun; now I’m happily sitting in a creepy old chair.
    I never thought there would be electrical watches; you can now call people with watches.I always thought I would achieve; I achieved a lifetime.

  8. Once there was an intelligent little boy; now there is a body of wrinkles.
    Once there was war and excitement; now there is peace and quiet.
    I wish I could hope and dream again; all I can do is try and try.
    I wish I could have adventures again; the world passes by me.
    I used to play and frolic; now I just paint, paint and paint.
    I used to keep secrets; now most of them are out.
    I never thought I was special; now I know I was wrong.
    I always thought I could achieve; I have achieved a lifetime.

  9. I used the honest lies to cover up the angry frustration ; now the any frustration covers up the honest lies .

    I used to see the northern lights dancing above me in the pitch black sky ; now I see grey clouds hovering above me.

    I wish I could dream magnificent thoughts ; I can only dream the good thoughts.

    Once there was a life with emotions; now there is a life with an empty mind.

    I never thought I had wonderous dreams ; now I only have the thoughts in my head .

    I always thought I had a lifetime ; now there is only a cliffhanger.

  10. My grandad

    Once there was a wise young chap; now there is a person who is not as wise.
    Once there were a happy young child; now I am a grumpy grandad.

    I wish I could go surfing; I can only sit on the beach.
    I wish I could climb a mountain; I can’t climb any more.

    I used to run; now I can only walk.
    I used to go on my bike; now I don’t even know how to ride a bike.

  11. Once there was a luxurious house; now there’s an old cabin.
    Once there was laughter with Ellie; now all I can hear is silence.
    I wish I could lived happily ever after; now it feels like my life has gone.
    I wish I could still bring my wife breakfast in bed; I can only bring it to myself.
    I used to run through the fresh green grass; now I can hardly walk.
    I used to be athletic; now I can’t even run for one minute.
    I never thought I would lose my wife and child; life can’t always go the way you want.

  12. Once there was a hero;now he sits back on his piano.
    Once there was a son;now he protects his foster.

    I wish I could eat the sandwiches you know back in the day; I can only think of them.
    I wish I could lift up weights;I can only think of it.

    I used to be the protecter ; now I’m a protectee.
    I use to jump out of planes; now I watch t.v

    I never thought I could feel power to save people; I love climbing shouting I can anything!
    I always thought; I could make the world a better place; when I runned up for priminister but it didn’t work 2 years later he is dead I looked after his kid he makes me happy now I’m a true hero.

  13. The long life

    Once there was a happy life ; now there is just Carl.

    The dream is to go Paradise Falls ;sadly Ellie passed away.

    Carl was love by Ellie ; he is not loved by Ellie but he is loved by his family and friends.

    Carl wished he could have a baby ; emotionally he had to watch other people with children.

    Carl wished to go back in time to see Ellie ; he could only see her on a photo.

  14. A life of dreams

    Once there was a garden full of sunshine ; now my dark future shadows me.
    Once there was a house full of happy screams ; now my rusty wheelchair echoes around my gloomy house.

    I wish I was not lonely ; now loneliness is life.
    I wish I could still climb trees ; now I can only just get out of my arm chair.

    I used to run marathons ; now I can only just walk.
    I used to do thing ; now I can only dream.

    I never thought I could achieve.
    I’ve achieved my dream.

  15. Once there was a field of flowers with a picnic blanket in the middle ; now the field is deserted.
    Once there was a friendly man ; now I am a grumpy , old troll.

    I wish I could go back in time ; I can only wish there was a time machine.
    I wish I could travel the world ; I can only see it on TV.

    I used to run miles ; now I can’t even walk.
    I used to dream ; now I have nightmares.

    I never thought I would live this long;I did.
    I always thought I could achieve;I achieved a lifetime.

  16. Once there was fields full of flowers;now there is a house full of chatter. Once there was an empty coabord;now it is full of shoes.

    I wish I could show them the good old days; I can only tell them stories. I used to have a laugh doing people’s hair; now I do it for fun.

    I won’t let the world pass by me; I will follow my dreams. Once there was a married couple; now we have a house.

    I never thought I would see so much change; I came from new mills to were I am now.

    Once I had three daughters; now I have a family.

  17. My life

    Once there was a life ; now there is nothing.
    Once there was a family; now they have gone.

    Once there were dreams; non of them are true.
    Once there were; now it is dull.

    I wish I could see my future; it can’t come to life.
    I wish I could go to paradise falls; now Max is dead.

    I always thought I could achieve a life time; it has never come to me.
    I never thought I could be a gymnast; I came to me.

  18. Once there was dancing; now there is just me sitting in my chair.

    I wish I could still use my knees; now I have to have knee pads.

    I wish I could go back in time ; I can only tell my past.

    I used to play the piano ; now I play by the heart.

    Once there was huge parties ; now there’s just calm quiet nights.

    Once there was roaring music ; now it is relaxing.

    I never thought I could achieve a lifetime ; I always thought I could be able to walk.

  19. Once there were dinosaurs roaming the earth; now there are bones in the ground.
    I used to dig all day; now I teach others.
    I wish I could go to Asia; It’s hard but it will happen some day.
    I never thought I would achieve such a life; I have achieved a life time.

  20. Once there was a hero in me ; now I wait for people to protect me.
    Once there were big dreams ; now the dreams had ended.

    I wish I could still see my mates ; I can only hear the faded voices of them.
    I wish still talk to my mates ; instead I talk to there graves.

    I used to train everyday ; now I train to sit on the sofa.
    I used to kill people for victory; now I befriended people.

    I never thought I would become an enemy to people in different countries ; I am afraid to travel.
    I never thought I would have so many frightening memories; now I feel trapped inside them.

    I have discovered a lifetime.

  21. Once there were bangs ;now there is peace.Once there were death; now it is not so quick .

    I wish I could fly a jet;now I can only Watch them pass by.
    I wish I could spend time with my wife; now I can only sit and do nothing.

    I used fight in a team ; now I respect that team.
    I used to kill people ; now I respect them.

    I never thought I would survive ;now I can’t believe I lived this long.I alway thought I could achieve;I have achieved a life time.

  22. Once there was fun ; now there isn’t.
    Once there was happiness ; now there isn’t.
    I wish I could still run very fast; now I am old and I struggle.
    I used to ride my bike; now I can’t.
    I used to be a strong man; now I am week.
    I here thought that I would grow old .
    I always thought I would be a football player; now I am too old.

  23. Once there was love and hope; now I am hated.
    Once there we’re meant; now there is ash.
    I wish I could jump the highest; I can only hope.
    I wish I could be loved; I can only be sad.
    I used to have a clear heart; now it has all melted away.
    I used to play in the park; I am breaking my back.
    I never thought I could see myself this old; I could die very soon.
    I always thought I could achieve; I have achieved a lifetime.

  24. Once there was a house with 2 people and 4 pets; now there is 1 person and 4 pets but one of the dogs died but we got a new one. Once there was a family in a house with 7 people; now there is 1 person.

    I wish I was not lonely ; I can only sit with my 2 dogs or play with then and I can only sit with mine children and sometimes my daughter dose my ironing. I wish I could be with my wife; but I can’t.

    I always used to be with my 5 children and my beautiful wife in the older days; then my children moved out and I was with my beautiful wife. I used to be with my wife; but I I am not.

    I never thought I would be a lone; I always thought mine wife would be alive now. I never thought I would be with my pets not my wife; but now I am.

  25. A lifetime
    Once there was a wife to live with; now here is only me to keep myself company,
    Once there were streaks is sunlight pouring into my garden; now it is covered with cloud,
    I wish I could sing to the birds; I can only scare them away,
    I wish I could go to Paradise Falls; I can only dream of going there,
    I used to see countryside; now I can see construction workers,
    I used to hear beautifully; now I wear hearing aids,
    I never thought I would see so much change; it’s getting familiar to me,
    I always thought I could achieve; I have achieved a lifetime.

  26. Once there was a house full of action; now there is nothing to do now everything has gone.
    Once there were extreme memories of having a baby; now vivid memories fill my brain.
    I wish I could show them the war days; now I can show the iphone 7s.
    I used to run marathons; now I run around the hospital.
    I never thought I’d see so much change; change is happening so fast.
    I always thought I would die at 75; I didn’t think I’d die at 105.

  27. Ones there was a house full of laughter ; now there is nothing to be heard.
    Ones there magical dreams; now the only dream Is to get up off the sofa.
    I wish I could still play; I can only imagine playing.
    I wish I could still walk; I can only dream about walking.
    I used to climb mountains; now I can only imagine them.
    I used to be clever; now I can’t remember.
    I never thought I would survive this long; I can only tell them my stories.
    I always thought I could achieve when I was old; now I can see I can’t.

  28. Once i had a family ; now I have nobody.
    I always thought I would make it to paradise ; I haven’t succeeded yet.
    I used to go on adventures; I can only stay shut behind the door.
    I dreamed of going to paradise falls; I can only dream in my bed.
    I wish I could see Ellie one last time; I can only see her coffin and ashes.
    I always thought I could be an explorer ; that will never happen.
    I always thought I could achieve ; I achieved a lifetime.

  29. The medieval times
    Once there was a happy, close relationship; now there is just loneliness.
    Once there was a medieval war; now there’s just peace.
    I wish I could play with my old hobby horse; I can only sit down and watch the world go past.
    I wish I could walk; now I just sit.
    I used to be a soldier; now just sit.
    I used to be a pianist; now I just look.
    I never thought I’d see so much change; change has become a familiar part of life.
    I always thought I could achieve; I have achieved a lifetime.

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